Sunday, 16 January 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #2

For this week's post (and future ones for a while) I'm going to turn to another WIP. Over time, you'll get to know this one. I've called it 'Help in Ages Past'. It is based, as too many of my story images or even plots (as in the case of this one) are, on a dream I had once. I'm not going to say much more, as I would like your thoughts. I will note that, in this section, 'monvir' means 'monster virus'.

The reports coming in were ... well ... bad. Losses of upwards of 500 men a day, casualties by the thousands.... The biological weapons were taking their toll on his troops. Nevermind that they were inoculated against their own monvirs, their immune systems simply couldn’t handle the monvirs that the enemy were creating – and spreading. And this aside from the physical weapons fire, which was wreaking its own havoc. This latest missive was no help.
Posted by LaurelCKriegler at 00:01

20 comments:

  1. Anonymous16 January 2011 at 12:53

    Biological weapons? Casualties? I'm sold!

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  2. Anonymous16 January 2011 at 14:06

    Oh, i like the sound of this. MORE!

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  3. D Carney16 January 2011 at 14:10

    Yikes! This sounds so hopeless...

    Keep it coming!

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  4. Lisa Fox16 January 2011 at 14:35

    This sounds like my kind of story. I can't wait to see more!

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  5. LaurelCKriegler16 January 2011 at 15:10

    LOL @ Fallon. There will be some more coming! Dee - I'll take that as a compliment :-D

    Thanks each of you so far. I'm very happy that you like!

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  6. Arlene16 January 2011 at 15:15

    biological weapons, men dying everywhere, love it.

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  7. Jayel Kaye16 January 2011 at 15:18

    Very interesting. I definitely want to read more of this. Great Snippet.

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  8. Angel Martinez16 January 2011 at 15:42

    Intriguing, to say the least. I sat here wondering if monster virus simply meant the next step up from a super virus or if it was turning men into monsters. (And if this is in the far future and whether we're on Earth at all and...and...) Fired up my ravenous curiosity.

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  9. Emily Cale16 January 2011 at 16:32

    I love anything with viruses and outbreaks (maybe not in real life, but definitely in fiction).

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  10. JoAnne Kenrick16 January 2011 at 16:42

    oh... seems so hopeless, biological weapons and casualties en-mass! hope they'll be more on this story in future SSS, dying to find out what happens!

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  11. Unknown16 January 2011 at 16:58

    Very nice six. Sounds dire.

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  12. Lex Valentine16 January 2011 at 18:38

    Annihilation seems to be closing in...

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  13. Jessica E. Subject16 January 2011 at 18:53

    You've really portrayed the direness of the situation well. Can't wait to read more!

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  14. Ellen Keener16 January 2011 at 19:44

    Really interesting concept. :)

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  15. Lauri J Owen16 January 2011 at 20:22

    Glad to see you pouring your heart into your writing, Laurel! Comma splice, tho, as an edit for the final edition: "Nevermind that they were inoculated against their own monvirs, [<-- delete comma; insert semi-colon] their immune systems simply couldn’t handle the monvirs that the enemy were creating – and spreading."

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  16. Kat Lively16 January 2011 at 20:55

    Very nice! Thanks for sharing.

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  17. Marie Dees16 January 2011 at 21:16

    Oh, show us more.

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  18. Unknown16 January 2011 at 21:31

    Definitely leaves me begging for more information! Great pic! Will definitely be looking for more.

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  19. Hailey Edwards17 January 2011 at 18:23

    Very dire indeed. I hope help's on the horizon.

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  20. Cate Masters17 January 2011 at 19:55

    I always envy authors who dream their stories first. Great six, sets a bleak scene very well.

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